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some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city while other think that bicycle is best discuss both and give your opinion

#people #cars #travel #city #bicycle
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IN , modern era government provides us different types of
transport
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. People
use
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transport
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 for their daily purposes and
have gone
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to
the
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work. It argued some like car for travelling
on the other hand
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 some like bicycles. Next paragraphs we
are
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elaborating
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elaborate
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on
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both.
Firstly
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 , the
bicycle
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 is a
free of cost
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 form of
transport
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furthermore
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use
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 of
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the
a
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bicycle
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 in routine is very helpful
to do
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for doing
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 exercise in mod Check the
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essay
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 was modified. You should check your
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 again. ern swamped life. On the other side, it is very beneficial for
reduce
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 traffic and air pollution . for instance, in 2016 all Russian workers used cycle
in
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apply
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every Friday
for going
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to go
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 to work the conclusion is that
a
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an
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immense fall
on
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in
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 air pollution and traffic problems.
Comparing
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Compared
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to other previous years.
Health
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The health
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rate of
Russian increase
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Russia increased
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by
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25% and rating of
heats
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heart
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 disease
falls down
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fell
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. On the flip side , some
uses
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use
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 cars to go to job or other
works
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work
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. They think luxurious is an amenity
transport
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 service. They imaged
bicycle
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 is only a waste of time and we cannot travel more distance in a few hours .
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, they prefer
car
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cars
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 rather than
cycle
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cycling
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.
for
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instance, my company is 25 kilometres from my house so by
the
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apply
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bicycle
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to go
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apply
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we feel very tiresome and indolent during work time IN my opinion , cycles are
the
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an
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ecofriendly
war
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way
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 of transportation rather than luxurious . It comes down
the
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to the
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 level of various health diseases mad keep us fit and healthy, but
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 for far travelling we can
use
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 cars . The conclusion is that people should
use
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cycle
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cycles
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in
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for
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 daily purposes
instead
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 of cars.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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