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Is the mental strength important for success in sports or is it more important to have strong and fit people in sports. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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Some people argue that physical fitness is the key source in sports, while coaches and others athletes
clam
assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing
claim
 that mental toughness is
also
 uttermost important in order to blow a competition away. From my viewpoint, I think both qualities are in equal measures, and I would illustrate
this
 below. On the one hand, having a strong and fitness body is
extremly essential factor
Suggestion
an extremely essential factor
extremely essential factor
 for sport people. In football match,
for example
, players do
relentness physical manoeuvre
Suggestion
the relentless physical manoeuvre
relentless physical manoeuvre
 to take possession of the ball in 90 minutes. Being win
this
 kind of sport game, they must practice various tremendous exercises as well as build endurance, so that they have ability to defeat their competitors in the league.
In addition
, without physical strength, the strategies would not able to
exceuted
extend in scope or range or area
extend
executed
execute
 nicely and professionally. As a consequence, the team will lose due to lack of
this
 necessary factor.
On the other hand
, a strong mental is
also
 significant for any
profesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
professionals
 to be successful, which covers a plenty of
strategies
Suggestion
strategy
 to become strong-willed players.
Firstly
, When athletes enter the match, they are under pressure of the crowd, their expectation of their coaches, family and even a whole country. Some well-know player
such
 as Cristiano Ronaldo or Messi are
great example
Suggestion
great examples
a great example
, people who remain calm and confident in almost situations. In
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diplomatic building that serves as the residence or workplace of a consul
consulate
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sion
a male human offspring
son
sin
Zion
, both features
are
Suggestion
is
 significant for sport player.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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