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s supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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There are many people who support the idea that supermarkets should only sell
food
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 items produced in the
country
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 itself. I do like the idea which will encourage countries to increase their
production
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 and decrease the import.
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, I strongly believe that depending entirely upon the
production
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 of their own
country
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 is
also
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 not quite possible. There is no doubt that depending upon the sole
production
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 of goods to be narrowed down to the
nation
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 can be a great solution to boost the economy of the
nation
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. In other cases, a
nation
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 cannot entirely benefit if there
is
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are
 less activities concerned to import and export.
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, the introduction of a supermarket allows the citizen to buy goods of various
variety
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varieties
 but it is less likely for a
nation
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 to produce
food
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 items that are available outside of the
country
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 or that tastes different. When we look at a
country
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 like Nepal, the statement to entirely rely on
nation
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 for
production
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 can be a difficult task as the citizens are unable to have
food
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 crisis due to
large number
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the large number
a large number
 of exports from various countries.
Although
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,
this
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 is not a good practice for a
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country but
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country, but
 even being a dominant
country
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 for agriculture, the
production
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 is still not sufficient to support all the citizens.
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, supermarkets are able to provide huge number of employment as well as
satisfy
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to satisfy
satisfying
 the needs of consumers.
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, even when being dependent on other countries for
food
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 might not be a solution to strengthen a
nation
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's
economy but
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economy, but
 it is a huge solution to avoid
food
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 crisis and supply needed
food
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 items to the citizens.

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