the diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies

The diagram illustrates information about

preparation

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the preparation

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of a

fish

pie

,

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apply

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and

the

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ingredients of it. At first

glance

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it is clear that

the process is divided

two

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main parts,

one

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of

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them

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preparation

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the preparation

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of the

potatoes

, and

second

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the second

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one is

preparation

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the preparation

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of the fresh

salmon

.

In addition

, the

fish

pie

consist

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of some ingredients,

such

as peas,

fish

, sauce, and potato. Looking into details, the initial step is that the

potatoes

are delivered to the factory and it takes up to one month. After

that

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the

potatoes

are cleaned, peeled, sliced, and chilled in the factory.

Following

this

, they are passed to the store. At the same time,

also

, the fresh

salmon

is delivered to the factory and

then

some ingredients – lemon juice and salt are added to the fresh

salmon

, so it takes about 12 hours or less.

After

this

step, it is passed to the steam oven to cook.

Then

workers remove skin and bones from the

fish

. After the

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control, prepared peas and sauce are added to it. In the

next

stage, the

potatoes

are added to the prepared fresh

salmon

. After the wrapping stage, the fresh

salmon

is frozen and dispatched to the stores.