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Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement? Give examples based on your own experience.

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For the survival of
the
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humans, some fundamental rights were chosen by the
government
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governments
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 of all countries of the world unanimously and among
them
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them,
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 housing is well noted. It is obvious that without proper housing, citizens cannot flourish themselves, so it is
a
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 responsibility of the government to ensure that and I strongly support the idea. There are
people
 of varied economic
condition
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conditions
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 in a country, some are very rich
while
 others are poor.
However
, rich
people
 can make arrangements for their own dream home, but, it remains a dream for
the
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poor
people
. So, those who can not have their housing arrangements done
it
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becomes
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 a responsibility for the state as the state is bound to make a comfortable life for all the citizens irrespective of their income.
Moreover
, these
under-privileged
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people
 may do a lot of welfare
of
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the
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society and the nation if they are well guided and given the least possible opportunities.
On the other hand
, if the government continues to help, all the
people
 without considering their ability,
people
 may become idle. When all the opportunities
will be
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 available to them without working,
this
 will destroy
the
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 inner strength
of making
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 something of their own which is detrimental to the development of a nation.
Hence
, the state should take all the abilities of a person into consideration before helping them. In the end, I believe that it is necessary for the governing body to take care of the citizens and at the same time they must try to bring the best out of them so that they become an asset, not a burden to the country.
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