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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources (such as the Internet and television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advances in technology plays an important role not only in
individuals life but
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the individual's life, but
the individual's life but
individual's life but
an individual's life but
individual life but
also
 in the education field.. Some people say that students can obtain much
knowledge
 with teachers than other sources. Personally, I hold merit with
this
 view and would like to discuss in following paragraphs. On the one hand, it is true that
internet
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the internet
 is an ocean of
knowledge
. We can gain a bunch of information about any topics from
Internet
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the Internet
. But some of the information on the Internet is not actually accurate. Due to the wide range of
knowledge
, it is so necessary for people to have selection skills and be able to gain expertise well in
knowledge
.
In
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On
 the television
also
 have
variety
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a variety
 of education programs that include various
infomation
a message received and understood
information
. But without the instruction of teachers, pupils still cannot reach the target of the lessons and may not understand profoundly. To offer an excellent example, the spread of Coronavirus in 2020 prevent learners going to school in
long period
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a long period
 of time, so many students have to learn through
Internet
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the Internet
. But due to the lack of interaction and not belong to
same intelligence
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the same intelligence, then
the same intelligence then
then
 students cannot approach
knowledge
 deeply.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that students significantly absorb
knowledge
 from teachers at school.
Firstly
, studying from school helps learners avoid the absence of concentration due to the fear of punishments, which would be given to their teachers in the discipline rules.
Secondly
, teachers can make boring subjects more interesting by using specific and professional teaching methods, it would help students more excited in boring lessons
such
 as History or Mathematics.
Finally
, teachers have been training massive of
knowledge
,
thus
 they can verify the information and comprehend what things are important for their students so they will convey the suitable things. To sum up, having considered the discussion above, I believe it
always create
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always creates
is always creating
has always created
 both positive and negative impacts, but
internet
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the internet
 can be useful if learners use it wisely.

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