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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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Regard to international
tourism
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 become so popular these days, many cities and towns have taken huge profit from
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ist
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the tourist industry
industry
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.
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, some people are worried about awful effect of foreign traveller on
environment
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 and local inhabitants;
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, I believe demerit of
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 is far behind of the merit of world travellers.
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, in my view the pro
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tourist
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 lies in the fact that it improves economic perspective and
tourist
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industry
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 play a vital role in many countries all over the world by creating a lot of job opportunities for people, so people rely on the income of
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ist
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the tourist industry
industry
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.
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, by increasing
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industry
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 offer new services
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 as restaurants and hotels.
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, international
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 enhances the standard of a person's life by bringing jobs and a source of revenue that may not exist before for them
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 mean younger people are encouraged to stay at in the community rather than seeking work in the city. Another advantage of
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industry
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, it familiar with culture of
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, international
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 has negative impact on
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ronment and
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the environment
 natural inhabitants, it means some people afraid that the local
environment
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 will be distracted as more people come to place.
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, excessive
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industry
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 in different community needs build more buildings that could destroy natural habitats and pose a hazard on animals and plant life.
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, international
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 contributes to increase garbage and wastage. In conclusion, the pro
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ernational
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 provides more job opportunities and source of income for people in their communities;
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, some disadvantages of global
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 that have a miserable effect on
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ronment and
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the environment
 natural habitats are not deniable.
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, I believe the downside of
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industry
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 stay far behind of its upside.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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