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The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram depicts the process of
domestic
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the domestic
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 central heating system
by
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apply
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utilizing cold
water
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.
Firstly
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, the cold
water
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 enters the house through
entry
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the entry
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 outlet and
stored
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is stored
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 in a
water
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 tank, located on the roof.
Also
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, when
this
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 tank overflows, the
water
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 is drained to a storage tank for conserving it for
further
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process
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processing
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.
Then
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, the liquid flows down
in
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into
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 the boiler on the ground floor, which utilizes gas or oil as fuel to boil the
water
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 and
to
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apply
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raise the temperature of the fluid.
Also
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,
this
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 hot
water
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 is supplied to the radiators which are located in different rooms to generate
heat
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 and taps for domestic use.
Furthermore
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, the radiators have small tubes that after giving
heat
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cools
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cool
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 down the
water
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.
Then
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,
this
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water
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 is carried back to the boiler by the use of the pump and the boiler
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heat
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heats
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 up the
water
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 and
supply
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supplies
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 it
to
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apply
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all over the house.
Overall
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, the
heat
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 is generated in
house
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the house
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 by using
the
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apply
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cold
water
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 and the process is called a domestic central heating system.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, heat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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