IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

In many countries people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. why do you think that is? what problems can this cause?

#countries #people #areas
Overall everywhere peoples are started moving to bigger cities from small towns due to various reasons. In
this
 essay I would like to give my view point on why it is happening and what issues it can bring. To start with, In rural areas, it is limited, it has fewer people and it is not developed technology or any one the new infrastructure, it doesn't have enough opportunity for the peoples which lead to peoples move out of the small towns towards urban areas. There are not a wide variety of institutions of higher educations.
Secondly
, In big cities they have many opportunities for works as well as so higher education. They got new developed technology and different kind of entertainment facilities, which attract people. Example, sports clubs, movie cinema etc. But, if everyone moved to urban areas peoples will start losing of their culture as in big cities, there are different cultural peoples so one can loss in touch of their own culture and not only that if everyone move to the city it will have bad impact on the agriculture sector's as no one will be there to do any kind of cultivation. To summarize, development is necessary for everything to success, but moving away from rural areas to urban area for
this
 development it is wrong, we should not neglect rural area as our major food source do come from rural areas and if we ignore them
then
 there will be scarcity of food.
Submitted by pocawe7396 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: