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the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000

the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000
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The two pie charts illustrate changes in
population
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the population
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 of different areas of the world between 1900 and 2000.
Overall
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,
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the
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pie charts
represents
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 a tremendous increase
of
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in
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 the world’s population, from 1,6
bllion
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billion
 to 6 billion in just one century. Asia as a region was the most populated
while
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 the smallest number of people lived in Africa. In
details
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, the ratio of Asian and European regions declined over the century. Europe’s ratio dropped from 25% to 14%,
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 Asia declined from 60% to 54%. From 1900 to 2000, the percentage of people living in Africa more than doubled from 4.5% to 10%,
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 Latin America’s proportion almost tripled in the same period. North America’s percentage
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however
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, remained constant at 5% in 1900 and 2000. The Middle East and North Africa, a new category in 2000, represented 6% of
world
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the world
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 population.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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