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Unemployment has become an increasing problem in the recent past What factors contribute to an increase in unemployment and what steps can be taken to solve the problem

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In recent years, the
unemployment
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 is a major topic of concern in today’s society. There are a number of factors behind
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 trend and several solutions should be adopted to improve the situation. There are two primary factors which le
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 at that time. One factor is that no knowledge and technique about jo
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the job
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jobs
Example, if a construction engineer does not know the process to create a housing design, he will surely be fired from the
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.
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, while the number of recruiting is limited, the la
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a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
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orce is too much,
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 leads to la
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a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
urplus and
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.
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 as, a
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only recruits
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o 30 people apply for
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 position, so the other 18 will not get the job. Since
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 issues are serious, the government and individuals should take steps immediately to address th
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 solution would be companies should provide in-depth training in professional skills and skills for employees.
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, opening intensive training courses for new employees, and making requests only when they meet the
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's criteria ,
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an they start work. A
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 measure would be the government should expand the la
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a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
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arket, develop the industrialization and modernize the country. Example, a
company
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 A is newly established and needs about 500 employees, which will reduce the amount of
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. In conclusion, there are a number of aspects why more and more people have not job.
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, there could be a several way of promote

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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