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Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Advanced technology and its innovative gadgets have trespassed in almost all aspects of life. It has become an integral part of human life.
However
, some opponents blame that
inventions
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invention
,
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,
 especially, mobile phones deter masses to be social. I am in favour of their belief and my arguments will be discussed
further
 in details. Myriad reasons are bolster my stand. The prominent is overuse of
internet
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the internet
. To elaborate, unlike
past
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the past
 when ancestors used to acquire knowledge through their elders and peers, nowadays, people surf associated websites whenever they are in need.
Internet
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The internet
 is
vast source
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a vast source
 of information
;
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;
 it has all answers of people's questions either they belong to personal or professional.
Besides
, it is a bed of roses for every techno savvy person.
For instance
, students like to solve academic as well as non academic queries from Google
instead
 of experienced teachers. As a consequence, it has widen a gap among youngsters and
olders
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
.
Accept space
.
In addition
, most of people indulge in a mobile phone and its provoking applications
such
 as children play video games, young prefer to chat and post on social applications and senior citizens spend their time on
You tube
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YouTube
Youtube
 to
listern
hear with intention
listen
 hymns and chants. All those activities are whale of time for them that leads towards lack of face to face interaction.
Furthermore
, through cell phone' s features, latest working and teaching styles like
distant
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distance
 learning and work at home snatch away
feeling
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the feeling
 of cooperation, competition that are merely feasible in conventional methods.
However
, those equipments are useful for those people
,
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,
who live far away from their native place
,
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,
 to stay connected with their kith and kin endlessly.
In other words
, by
updated
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updating
 applications
,
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,
they converse with their family members irrespective places through
video medium
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video media
the video medium
.
Hence
, they can alleviate nostalgic feelings. To encapsulate,
although
 unprecedented technology is a boon for some immigrants
,
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,
 it expands a gap among people because of its overindulgence.
Therefore
, physical communication must be required in order to improve relations and more socialise that builds
strong bond
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a strong bond
strong bonds
 and harmony in the society.

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