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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is currently a contentious argument over whether family
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 is being harmed by the high-speed and pressure of contemporary lifestyles. I totally agree with
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 opinion because the fast pace leads to less
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 for families to be together, and stress leads to arguments between family members. The main reason why I believe family
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 is being compromised is because families have less
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 to be with each other.
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 is due to family members being busier at work and with their social lives. As well as
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, people have many things they have to do these days
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 as checking email, updating their online social status and so less
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 is left for family
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. To illustrate, I spend about two hours online every night attending to daily correspondence before chatting with my family members, whereas ten years ago I would spend
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 with my family as soon as I walked in the door. Another reason why I support the notion that families are being impacted negatively is that the pressure of
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 these days means that even when families do get together arguments are more likely.
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 is because everyone feels tired and they are more likely to get irritated and react to their heightened emotional levels. In conclusion, I completely agree that the rapid pace and stressful nature of contemporary lifestyles are having negative consequences on family relationships.
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 is because family members have less
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, and when they are together they feel less relaxed. Given
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 situation, it seems that family members should try to be more supportive of one another and
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also parents need to
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parents also need to
 set aside regular times for families to relax together.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern life
  • fast pace
  • stress
  • negative effect
  • family bonds
  • working hours
  • conflicts
  • advancements in technology
  • distract
  • family time
  • financial pressures
  • living standards
  • strain
  • individuals
  • family activities
  • traditions
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