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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the modern technological century, people can do many activities via the internet,
such
 as shopping, working and even keep in touch with relatives of friends by using video call. I believe that living without face-to-face communication has brought a significant number of drawbacks, but I would partly agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, residents’ life will be more convenient and easy due to the dramatically increased of the Internet.
To begin
 with, the people nowadays are able to shopping and working online which will not time-consuming because they can stay at home and do anything without travelling with a long distance. Almost the consumer’s home, and they just need to pay for shipping fee, which is always cheaper and sometime there is some promotion so the product’s price can be discounted.
Moreover
, the Internet brings user the opportunities to contact with the friends or relatives that they cannot meet in the daily life due to the distance.
For example
, there are a substantial number of apps
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and Whatsapp to call for every day from all around the world. On the other,
although
 social network and internet have a huge of benefits, there are
also
 some drawbacks of these online sources.
Initially
, the interactive communication would be reduced because the citizens spend too much time on surfing the Internet to shop and chat.
For instance
, children in the modern life have tended to play game on the Internet, so they do not have time for outdoor activities like football, go camping, and so on, which helps them to comprehensive development.
Besides
, lacking the socializing skill, the citizens can cause some health problems like myopia, obesity, and so on. To sum up, the benefits it brings do not justify the fact that it is damaged badly on our interactive communication.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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