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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #cost #fuel
In
this
 day and age,
environment
 has been controversial issues in modern society. Few individual believe that the cost of
fuel
 is a good way of reducing environmental pollutions. I personally agree with
this
 premise.
First
 and foremost, people could realize serious situations about our
environment
 matters.
For example
, the majority of people drive their private cars rather than taking a transport system
such
 as bus, subway, train. It is greatly causing many petroleum, which lead to enormous air pollution. Not only they prefer to be a convenient, but
also
 it may be saving the time than taking a public transportations. As
such they
Accept comma addition
such, they
 simply do not know how many car makes
fuel
 and consume a lot of petroleum due to their laziness. On the top of that, it will be great of preserving our earth due to paying more petrol.
For instance
, with the increasing the price, many people consider their living expense.
As a result
, they will reduce the most spending the sector of expenditure. For these reasons,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think if we were to increase the price of
fuel
, it might be big influences on our natural
environment
. Because, they would not drive very much when
fuel price rise
Suggestion
a fuel price rise
, or they may think about saving a gas, and result in they might try to do car pool with their neighbours, which means the achievement of preserving our nature problem.
Furthermore
, it is likely to make better our lifestyle that
practing
 less used gas impact on fresh air and less fumes. It,
also
, is helpful our
next
 generation to live good conditions. In a nutshell, all of considered things are that government should strictly regulate by making a policy for the
environment
 world and education at school have to teach children how we could effort to protect the
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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