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Some people believe that robots are important for humans to develop their future, while others think that it is a dangerous invention that will impact society negatively. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today's we are living in techno-savvy world.
Human
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A human
The human
 makes robots which as purpose
for
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of
 works as
human
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a human
 does. Few people are supporting robotics
workdone
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work done
, which they believe it will make
bright and prosparitical future
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a bright and prosparitical future
the bright and prosparitical future
 for
next generation
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the next generation
.
However
, Some people
says
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say
, it could be worse effect on our cultural society, if we
relay
have confidence or faith in
rely
 on robots. I will discuss both views and give my opinion at the end of the essay. To start up with developing side of
future status
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the future status
 of robots,
Firstly
, Robots are invented and assembled by
scientist
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scientists
the scientist
a scientist
,
Accept space
,
 the internal functioning
also
 done by them. Intentionally, they believe robots can be replace human at every
sections
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section
. It's one time investment for robot installation at human
place
Accept comma addition
place, then
then
 after it's easy to maintain how it could be
work
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workable
.
Furthermore
,
employeer
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 do not require any surveillance to watch on their performance, it can be done at their home on program code software.
For Instance
, many restaurants
keeps
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keep
 robots as waiters, cooks and receptionist to attract people to visit their restaurant frequently. Customers are
facinated
having your attention fixated as though by a spell
fascinated
vaccinated
 to get service
by
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from
 a machine which seems perfectly a human. That's how
employeer
a person or firm that employs workers
employers
employer
 wouldn't need to pay any kind of monthly salaries to any of
this
plural of "this"
these
 employees. On the other sides, Some people
says
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say
 it's being
controlling
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controlled
 by
human
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humans
a human
, but it's not a human, which means that
makes
an animal that produces gametes (spermatozoa) that can fertilize female gametes (ova)
males
 can't feel mercy over any accident or tragedy.
Moreover
, If everyone
replace
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replaces
 robots at
human place
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the human place
, Honestly, It will be brutal effect on
unemployment rate
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the unemployment rate
 and it will be
leads
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led
 to drop down country's GDP and economical growths.
For example
, Recently, a scientist created a WAR robot who can replace a soldier at boarder security when it
was
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Was
 on
testing field
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the testing field
 to functional shoots few targets by gun, Suddenly, that robot straight up his gun point toward
training crew
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the training crew
 and shoot him down, that person was
died
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dying
at
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on
 the spot, it might have
codeing
act of writing in code or cipher
coding
 failure. That's why, it's
prove
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proven
proving
proved
 truth that
this
 is an
endangerous
pose a threat to; present a danger to
endangering
 object
in
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of
 our cultural society. To sum up, Significant use of robots in
this
 world it might great technological advancement for future generation. Conséquence, it could be
leads
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led
leading
lead
 to job loss and poor economic for any country, which effect on inflation and poverty of that particular country. I
assertly
 against that robots are developed in
cultural society
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a cultural society
.
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