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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided pie charts indicate factors influencing people’s choices of two means of transport to
work
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 namely bicycle and automobile. Generally speaking, people make a decision on cycling to
work
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 chiefly for health, fitness, and environmental advantages. Meanwhile, others drive to
work
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 comfort. Looking at the first chart, well-being and environmentally friendly benefits are the main reasons accounting for the highest proportion at about 30% among those who ride to
work
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. There is a total of 28% of citizens prefer
bicycle
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bicycles
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 as they do not have to worry about the costs and parking problems.
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, only 12% of people think bikes are faster compared with cars. When it comes to reasons for driving to
work
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, about two-fifths of drivers consider comfort the core value of going to
work
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 by car
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 the percentage for safety aspect is just around 11%. The figure for the distance to
work
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 holds the
second
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 position, which occupies approximately 20% of the total proportion. In terms of speed and personal needs, these two reasons share
the
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 similar percentage of 14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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