Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

There are a
lot
of obsolete buildings
in
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on
the
earth which
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earth, which
saved by law.They are
main part
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the main part
of the
folk's
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folks'
history.From some people's
perspective they
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perspective, they
should be destroyed and
instead
of them the new structures should be built.I totally disagree with
this
opinion
,
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,
and I will explain my viewpoint in
this
essay.
First
of all
,
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the structures which built in the past are
heritage
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a heritage
from ancestors.We must protect them.They built these buildings by hand and keep them for the forthcoming period.So
,
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,
nowadays they exist in the many countries.They
rememberence
the ability to recall past occurrences
remembrance
for these nations from their history.
This
structures
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structure
sew
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sews
a
lot
of difficult situations and wars.They are
witness
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witnessing
from that period.
Therefore
,
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,
the people should protect and keep them
instead
destroying and knocking down.Yet
,
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,
today many people think they are unnecessary.And they should be destroyed.
Instead
of them a new and modern buildings should be built.They are wrong.It is cultural property of the every country.
Secondly
,
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,
these buildings are more important for the tourism industry.As a reason
,
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,
a
lot
of tourists will interest to the history of these states.And they may want to watch the old and historical buildings.
Perspectively
,
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,
there
are
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is
a
lot
of income from tourism
,
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,
If these countries exist an ancient buildings than a new
ones
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one
.The new structures are
also
necessary
,
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,
but to build them
instead
of the old ones is a wrong action.These kinds of buildings which build in the present are exist in many other countries.But the historical building which the same with other countries aren't exist.Because
,
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,
all of them are extraordinary
,
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,
and they have own potential secrets. On the whole
,
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the old buildings are important parts of the countries.The people should protect them
,
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,
instead
destroying.They should keep structures until future generation will know about them.All the reasons which I mentioned above are evidence of my perspective.
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