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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era, where the nation is soon about to become a developed country still, few people believe that person's culture and character can be understood with the help of their dressing sense.
However
, I partially stand
with
Suggestion
by
 the said statement and
further
,
this
 essay will debate the reasons behind it by
first
, stating about the disagreement part and in the latter half, the cause for
agreement
Suggestion
the agreement
 will be highlighted followed by the conclusion. To commence with, In
this
 21
century which
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century, which
 is
also
 a maverick
world there
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world, there
are
Suggestion
is
 still, a plethora of people who earns limited, but still maintain their standard of dressing in an elegant way followed by the latest fashion trend which is inevitable. To cite an example, In India myriad number of families which do not even fall in the category of middle class;
however
, they still carry themselves in a graceful way that even experts will
also
 get bewildered and will start believing that they have a high standard and belongs to
a
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an
 affluent family with high standard of culture.
On the other hand
, it is true that
majority
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the majority
 of people deeply follow their religious beliefs and wear only selected garments which are
opined
used of mouth or eyes
opened
 by their monks and later on it becomes easy for anyone to know about their way of life. To illustrate, few districts in
India where
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India, where
 Muslims are in
majority
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the majority
 they are bound to wear limited type of outfits and when they mix up with the society understand their life values is not a challenge anymore. In summary, at
this
 juncture fashion is at zenith among
people which
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people, which
further
, makes it strenuous to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 about one's nature. Contrarily, places where religious practice is immense and uncompromising figuring about their disposition is a possibility.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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