In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?

There is an argument that doing sport has other purposes
such
as become famous and rich rather than past that the goal of doing sport and taking part in
world
competitions was the h
onor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
of their countries.
Also
, it has a lot of effects on young people who desire to be rich and famous. I totally agree with
this
idea and will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. In the
last
few decades, athletes became a new sector of rich people in their community. Especially football players. They have luxury cars, houses, and
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Since they get a lot of money when they are a member of a team and they get more rewards when they win a championship. It seems that they play or win just for money and they are getting richer and richer. Whereas in the past, the purpose of taking part and winning in the
world
competitions was showing their abilities and the flag of their countries t
o
Suggestion
in
the
world
.
However
, today young people model athletes' lives. What I mean by
this
is that when they see athletes' cars, houses and their happiness they prefer to sport to be a member of a team for being famous and get a lot of money. They dream to take part in
world
competitions and break records just for its p
rize
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
and the reputation they get. A recent interview with young boys has shown that they know most of the football players and their cars. 80% of them wanted to be a football player when they grow up. When asked them their reasons 'we can buy new luxury cars' they said. In conclusion, the purpose of doing sports and wining in championships should be the same as it was in the past because they became champions to show their ability t
o
Suggestion
in
the
world
and they were proud of their countries. While today young people desire to be an athlete to be wealthy and well-known.
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