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Some people think media should be allowed to publicize information on someone’s private life. Some others believe that media should be regulated in this regard. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and relevant examples.

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In the recent advance media era, the tiny activities of masses
offenly
in an open way
openly
 shown
on
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in
 mass media. It is believed by human beings that the press should
show
 about personal
life
 to the world, but others are opposite to
this
 view. I personally stand by the latter viewpoint
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In my coming paragraphs, I shall discuss both points and give my own agreement. On private publicity side
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the personal experience of some mankind provide
source
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a source
 of motivation to the other human beings and uplift various new skills among
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people.
For example
, if a person help the poor or needy people
,
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 who are hardly meet their basic amenities
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then
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the masses
also
 get inspiration to do something for them by getting information from
media
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the media
. So
,
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in
such
 cases the media should personal
life
 of people to the society.
Moreover
, there are multiple crimes
occur
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occurring
 in the society to dwindle these situations the news channels can
show
 the personal issues of the people to the whole world to erase the number of the criminals in the world. On turning to the confidential lifestyle side, the mankind
have
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has
 right to enjoy their personal
life
.The personal
life
 should be under the command of human beings.The media spread fake news about personal issues
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so it
give
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gives
 dim light
to
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of
 the social status of the human being. To illustrate, if the press
show
 about domestic affairs of
particular family
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a particular family
the particular family
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then
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it may boom the chances of increase family problem
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So
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I believe that the media should not
show
 any confidential issue to the society. Apart from
this
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 everyone has right to enjoy their
life
 in own style
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but, by catching single moments by
media
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the media
 can destroy the celebration part of the
life
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 I think
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the media should interfere in personal lifestyle of the people
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Accept space
.
 So
,
Accept space
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the mankind can enjoy their
life
 without any hesitation of revile any moment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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