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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The picture illustrates the
stock
price
 of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016. We can see that
while
 Apple’s
stock
value
 fluctuated dramatically to the highest
point
, Google’s
stock
value
sabled
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disabled
 between 2011 and 2016.
Besides
 the
stock
price
 of Facebook had
upward
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an upward
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 trend
while
 Yahoo’s
stock
value
 had
downward
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a downward
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 trend.
Firstly
,
according to
 the picture,
the
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Apple’s
stock
price
 began at 5000 in 2011. After a year, it increased dramatically from 5000 to 35000 at the highest
point
.
Then
 it declined to 7000 in 2013. From 2013 to 2016 there was a staggering increase
of
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Apple’
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stock
price
 with 11000 in 2014,
lowest
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point
 at 4000 and more than 5000 in 2016. In the contrast, the
stock
value
 of Google stabled at 1000
during
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for
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 6 years.
Secondly
, despite the same beginning
point
 at 8000 in 2011,
the
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Facebook’s and Yahoo’s
stock
price
 had different trends. The
stock
value
 of Yahoo decreased
gradualy
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gradually
 to 4000 in 2014. There was a stable
price
at
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of
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 4000 from 2014 to 2015.
Then
 it continued to drop
with
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to
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the
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its
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 lowest
point
at
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in
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 2000 in 2016.
In
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On
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 the other hand,
the
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Facebook’s
stock
price
 increased steadily from 8000 to 20000 in 6 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, price, value, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stabled" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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