Some government say how many children a family can have in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes

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The number of children that a family can have is controlled in some countries through taxes.
This
situation could be that the older people increase in some nations. But
also
this
may help to control the
population
.
However
, I don’t agree with the
government
try to say how many children
this
institution should have because I believe that the reality that the state want to establish could have
horrible reaction
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a horrible reaction
for
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to
from
of
the society. The reason for I
am disagree
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have disagreed
with
this
is since I see is that the psychological illness could grow, due to if a couple have one child
this
would do that their parents will try to give everything whatever demanding child so
this
individual likely be selfish and independent.
For example
, in China the
government
controlled for several years the family group, and
this
made that in
this
country would exist many depressions So that situation only give a lot of diseases.
On the other hand
, I think that the
government
tries to control
the
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the population because
population
because in some nations
such
as India or China facing challenge to make that the resources get to everyone. The high density leads to diseases and lack of basic facility like
healthcare food
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healthcare, food
and education in these countries.
Moreover
, people will be less educated because no chance for everyone to be educated and crimes will appear and violence increase. To conclude If our
government
take
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takes
necessary steps
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the necessary steps
for utilising our own experience it will be blessings.
Firstly
, our
government
has to identify people who
is qualified
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are qualified
for which work.
Secondly have
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Secondly, have
to segregate and provide them according to their own experienced based work. By
this
way
population
will be
blessing
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blessed
. In a nutshell
population
always a blessing for any nation if
Government
utilize
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utilizes
them in a proper way.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, I think that for the better
psychology health
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psychology, health
is better that every person is free to decide how many children they want to have.

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