In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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youngsters
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are equally important.
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, some part of the society ponders only youth to be an active part,
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the rest considers elders are necessary. I
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believe they have specific roles to be played at their own levels.
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necessity of these age extremities in the world. To commence with, one of the reasons, why senior citizens are considered gold is because they are the books that
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our cultural backgrounds, they can be the best source to make a cherub familiar
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his customs.
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, working parents generally prefer to leave their children with their grandparents, so that they
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inculcate good moral values and know about their
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.
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, family heads are respected for their wisdom, which came to them through various life experiences.
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is why, their opinion matters before beginning a work,
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, adolescents have their own place in the family. They are thought to have maximum brain and body working at
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age,
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of which, they can bring profit not only to the family but to the nation as well.
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, when the youth wins an Olympic medal, he gains
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and honour of his near and dear ones
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from the country
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. In conclusion,
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humans are still divided upon the notion,
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, I think each section
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a particular role and
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interdependent on each other, as elders help a person to build strong moral character in turn youth help to take family ahead,
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both deserve to be respected.
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