These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In
first place
Suggestion
the first place
, now in these days, mobile phones and
internet
became very
wide spread
widely circulated or diffused
widespread
. Generally, almost all the students of high school and
undergratudate
a university student who has not yet received a first degree
undergraduate
also
have
this
and available to them. Previously, education and knowledge was not
wide spread
widely circulated or diffused
widespread
as it is today.
Firstly
, it helps for education. Students who really want to educate
them selves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
,
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,
they can educate because
od
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
the information available on the
internet
. Especially, who are in research and
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
it is much useful.
Nevertheless
, useful for all who want to study.
Secondly
, choosing
career
Suggestion
careers
. Before so many fields were not there.
For instance
, previously, Human Resources department was not existing.
Like wise so
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Likewise, so
Likewise so
many new studies and departments are upcoming. Parents will not be
knowing
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known
all upcoming new studies and departments. New generation children can surf
internet
and can choose new carriers.
Thus
, helps in career choosing.
Thirldly
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Thirdly
, online classes. In fact, it
is know
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is known
to all that lockdown is going on in most part of the world. Now in these days, studies are going on
by
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with
online classes.
In addition
, it is
know
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known
fact
to
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of
all that, information searching is very easy on any topic.
Also
, Connecting friends and relative is much
easiler
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easier
and it is wide now by using some apps like
facebook
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Facebook
,
whatsapp
,
instagram
etc.. Actually, I personally was not connected with friends and relatives earlier, but after mobile phones and
internet
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the internet
came into existence, I
am always connected
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always connect
with them by calling them and on the other apps like
whatsapp
,
facebook
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Facebook
etc. Generally,
every one
all people
everyone
is connected with
thier
of them or themselves
their
friends and relative now in these days because of
these
denotes a person or thing
this
. But, in
contrary there
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contrary, there
are some flaws are there.
For example
, Porn, became very easy to surf and watch for all the ages, even
then
it is restricted in some countries. Previously it was not that easy and accessible to all.
some
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Some
dating sites are
encouring
giving courage or confidence or hope
encouraging
people to have cross relations and for
extra marital
characterized by adultery
extramarital
relations. Children who are always on mobiles are
pron to
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prone to
pronto
become disobedient children.
This
is told by many parents
by
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of
their experience. Especially, in infants and babies,
this
is causing health issues because of radiation it
esxerts
put to use
exerts
. In conclusion, these days, mobile phones and the
internet
are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially.
Thus
, the advantages of
this
development outweigh the disadvantages.
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