These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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the first place

, now in these days, mobile phones and

internet

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became very

wide spread

widely circulated or diffused

widespread

. Generally, almost all the students of high school and

undergratudate

a university student who has not yet received a first degree

undergraduate

also

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have

this

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and available to them. Previously, education and knowledge was not

wide spread

widely circulated or diffused

widespread

as it is today.

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, it helps for education. Students who really want to educate

them selves

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

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they can educate because

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the information available on the

internet

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. Especially, who are in research and

developement

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

it is much useful.

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, useful for all who want to study.

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, choosing

career

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careers

. Before so many fields were not there.

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, previously, Human Resources department was not existing.

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Likewise, so

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many new studies and departments are upcoming. Parents will not be

knowing

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known

all upcoming new studies and departments. New generation children can surf

internet

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and can choose new carriers.

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, helps in career choosing.

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, online classes. In fact, it

is know

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is known

to all that lockdown is going on in most part of the world. Now in these days, studies are going on

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with

online classes.

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, it is

know

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known

fact

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all that, information searching is very easy on any topic.

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, Connecting friends and relative is much

easiler

posing no difficulty; requiring little effort

easier

and it is wide now by using some apps like

facebook

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Facebook

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instagram

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etc.. Actually, I personally was not connected with friends and relatives earlier, but after mobile phones and

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internet

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the internet

came into existence, I

am always connected

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always connect

with them by calling them and on the other apps like

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facebook

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Facebook

etc. Generally,

every one

all people

everyone

is connected with

thier

of them or themselves

their

friends and relative now in these days because of

these

denotes a person or thing

this

. But, in

contrary there

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contrary, there

are some flaws are there.

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, Porn, became very easy to surf and watch for all the ages, even

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it is restricted in some countries. Previously it was not that easy and accessible to all.

some

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Some

dating sites are

encouring

giving courage or confidence or hope

encouraging

people to have cross relations and for

extra marital

characterized by adultery

extramarital

relations. Children who are always on mobiles are

pron to

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prone to

pronto

become disobedient children.

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is told by many parents

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their experience. Especially, in infants and babies,

this

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is causing health issues because of radiation it

esxerts

put to use

exerts

. In conclusion, these days, mobile phones and the

internet

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are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially.

Thus

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, the advantages of

this

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development outweigh the disadvantages.

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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

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