One Government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in arts events in the same years

The charts show the proportional government spending on arts and the
number
of people participating in 1995 and 2005. Based on the data of the proportional government spending on the
art
in 1995, it
show
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shows
music
art
is the biggest portion
in
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of
the
art
, it is around 50 % and follow with visual
art
, theatre, and
music
. The proportion has different in 2005 which is
music
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music, art
art
has same portion with theatre, it is around 37.5 % and follow with literature and visual arts which have same value. By another chart It
show
Suggestion
shows
the
number
of people participating in arts events. The highest
number
of people reached by
music
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music, art
art
in 2005 around 150,000 people and in 1995 around 120,000 people. It
follow
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follows
is followed
with
theatre
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theatre, art
art
which has around 90,000 people in 2005 and around 80,000 people in 1995. Visual arts in
third
rank, namely around 50,000 people in 1995 and around 40,000 in 2005. And the
last
literature
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literature, art
art
has
number
under 50,000
people but
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people, but
the
number
in 2005 more than 1995.
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