Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays schools are a significant part of our
life
and people have different views about how much teachers can influence children. I believe that teachers have numerous effects on children’s
life
and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
more than their parents. On the one hand, teachers play a crucial role in children’s
life
as they start to go to elementary school from an early age and they have not an exact way of attitude and observe the world too
simple even
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simple, even
they cannot talk about their opinions or what they really want because their parents provide them with all amenities.
However
, when they go to school for the
first
time, they learn to have
social community
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a social community
with their peers and teachers enforce some strict laws to control them better.
students
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Students
consider their teacher as a role model and compete with each other to be the best student in their class,
children
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the children
are with their teacher every day around 6 hours and do anything are assigned to them, talk and debate with teachers about different subjects so they are more likely to have so close attitude and mindset with their teacher.
On the other hand
, parents are responsible to provide basic needs for their children.
As a result
of economic difficulties, they are pressed for time and face several financial
issues especially
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issues, especially
people who live in a deprived area so they have not enough time to teach them social norms.
Moreover
, the type of
relationship sometimes
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relationship, sometimes
does not allow them to be more punctual and decisive with their children.
For example
, sometimes children should be punished (not physically for instant doing unpaid work for
Charites
a foundation created to promote the public good (not for assistance to any particular individuals)
charities
) so as to
being
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be
a better citizen and learn
life
lessons but
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lessons, but
parents find it really difficult but teachers do all of
this duties
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these duties
this duty
as they undergo training in order to learn how to share their knowledge and how to treat with a wide range of students especially with nonconformists of them. Based on all of the reasons I mention above, I believe that teachers influence children more than their parents as they are kept in touch with each other far more and teachers have been taught how to treat children.
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