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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impactof it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs becouse of it.

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In
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this
plural of "this"
these
days online shopping
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days, online shopping
day online shopping
day day online shopping
 is becoming
extremely popular thing
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an extremely popular thing
 to our lifestyle. As the
qonsequently
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consequences
consequently
 that affect the environment and on people who lost their jobs
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of it. Today our life
become
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has become
more busy
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busier
. People do not have enough time for shopping. So, they prefer online shopping that
become
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becomes
 more normal useful thing in
this
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days
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day
. But everything has two aspects like a day has two sides, darker and brighter. Some online shopping has
drawbacs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 as well as benefits too. I can support my opinion with following examples. For
instanse
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
,
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,
 people can
purschase
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
purchase
 everything from staying at home. They will not have to go outside for buying items. As well as being at home is comfortable and surf the internet searching for their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 products. As the
result people
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result, people
 will save their precious time.
This
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 result is
also
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 saving fossil fuel which leads to reduce air pollution. On
other side
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the other side
 many small businesses or sale places have
feiled
fail to do something; leave something undone
failed
filed
filled
 with the emergence of modern ways of shopping. Though, it has
genereted
bring into existence
generated
 employment for most of the
jb
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
job
 seekers who
is
Suggestion
are
unemployet
not engaged in a gainful occupation
unemployed
aat
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 that very moment. Local shops cannot invest as much as other big enterprises to stay in the market. To put it in the nut shell, it is
advanteges
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
advantage
are
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being
 overweight it is
disadvanteges
constituting a disadvantage
disadvantageous
. But
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 can reduce these disadvantages, if it provides with jibs to unemployed people.

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