You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: • what your suggestion is • why you think this suggestion will improve the park • when you would like to see this suggestion in action

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to an improvement of “Family” park located near to the Victory street as well as to my home. “Family” park is a spacious place with

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various entertaining facilities for young people. It would be excellent if you consider a suggestion to build bicycle paths separated from sidewalks. As you know there are many people on bicycles, especially, on the weekends, and sidewalks are full of them. By building

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broad bicycle paths parents will not worry about their children being hit. It will decrease the number of cyclist-children accidents as well as injuries. I would like

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suggestion to be implemented by the summer of

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year as the park is full of local citizens more than ever

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season. Please, do not hesitate to contact me at a suitable time should any additional questions arise over my mobile phone

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. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Kao

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

161 words

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You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: • what your suggestion is • why you think this suggestion will improve the park • when you would like to see this suggestion in action

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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