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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
Yes, I think they have
this
 potential. When a person watches a film or a
serie
similar things placed in order or happening one after another
series
, s/he may be affected by the characters in that film or
serie
similar things placed in order or happening one after another
series
serial
 and want to have what the characters have because s/he may think that they are cool, and s/he needs to imitate them to feel cool. To grow economically, people in a country should make
more purchasing
Suggestion
more purchases
, so if people want to have more possessions, the economy can go up. Because if some buy more, some need to sell more and
therefore
 produce more, and
this
 overall can affect the economy in a good way. I am not sure about it, but among people having more possession generally means that
this
 person is wealthy. People can keep thinking like
this
 about having many possessions. I am vegetarian, and I like eating vegetables because they are more
healhty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
, and
this
 kind of diet is sustainable for the world. Normally, my father cooks in our
home
 because my mother comes
home
 tired, and my father helps her. I don't watch or follow any cookery programme because I rarely watch TV. I generally prefer to eat at
home
 because I want to feel relaxed while eating. I want to talk about my grandmother's
home
. She lives far from the city centre, but it is not too far away. Her place is located in the middle of nature. Her
house
 has a mountain scenery. She has her own garden, and in there they used to breed roosters and chickens, and my grandfather still does gardening in
this
 garden, they have some fruit trees in there. Their
house
 has three floors. They live on the
third
 floor. Their
house
 is spacious and large. You feel comfortable there. One feature I don't like about my grandmother's
house
 is that it has no good isolation and because of its space, it is hard to heat it quickly and efficiently, so when I am there, I feel cold if the weather is bad.

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