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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #student #behaviour
Negative student
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in
school environment
Suggestion
the school environment
school environments
 has become alarmingly high about which many people are concerned.
School
 managers mention the steady growth of these trends will damage the education system. I believe that you can find the reasons of
this
 disorder in our educational environments and non-qualified teachers. It is strongly proved that the atmosphere has a significant effect on human reactions. Low air quality standards, lacking of air conditioning, insufficient space for playing, crowded environments are some examples that scientists have proven to be linked to
students
Suggestion
students'
student
student's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. The reason is that students are young and energetic so they need to have more outdoor activities. Governments should modify
school
 standards and allocate more subsidies to
school
 managers to reorganize the facilities and space and
also
 to change the shape of our educational area from an office to a calm place for our students.
Besides
 that, most of our teachers and
school
 managers are not qualified personnel. Statistics show that just three out of twenty five teachers in my country have passed mental related courses and are familiar with some basic needs of students and youngsters. The results attributed to our
school
 managers is worst by just three persons out of a hundred which indicates that there is a strong demand for using of psychologists and educational consultants to plan
a
Suggestion
an
 appropriate program.
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