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Some people believe that educating children altogether will benefit them. Others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given speacial courses. Discuss those views.

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The advent of education has probably had the most significant effects on everyday life. Some people opine that teaching youngsters together will have
merits
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merit
 while others are of the opinion
clever
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cleverer
 descendants should be taught disparately and given crucial lessons. No sensible person will deny that it is important that students should study hard.
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Also all
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Also, all
 students of the same class should be treated
eqully
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
equally
. To clarify
this
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 point,
such
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 as young kids will help for other usual children who has imperfect
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 subjects.
Additionally
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, the well-informed teenagers would be motivation not only for
kids but
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kids, but
also
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 change their parents' habit too.
Thus
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, it is clear that the attention of parents more significant role for their child to become a knowledgeable person in
lifetime
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a lifetime
. From the other hand, teach special children separately provide huge opportunities for their future. As a model, intelligent brains differ from others, because of their interests only in the way of education and they can easily learn subjects, difficult mathematical and physical
formules
a group of symbols that make a mathematical statement
formulas
 without any efforts. A strong probability,
most young
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younger
 generation requires
high
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highly
 qualified educators and
also
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high quality
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the high quality
a high quality
 of education systems.
Consecuently
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Consequently
, they will find their own road and assist
to
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in
with
 the development of the country. In views of the arguments outlined above,
although
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 there are merits of approaches to teach students of different abilities, it would be better to teach them in a mixed class.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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