It is more important for school children to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in schools, children are exposed to various matters of historical topics from all around the world which are prepared based on
curriculum
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the curriculum
. Students can learn about their
home
town
’s historical aspects or
history
of foreign countries. Personally, I hold the perception that learning local
history
by students has a numerous
advantages including
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advantages, including
getting familiar with reasons of traditions and surviving
home
towns
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town's
history
.
Firstly
, I believe strongly that curriculum of schools should include local
history which
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history, which
helps children to know the fundamental story and reason of some traditions to get more interest in them. Whenever students in school get to know
history
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the history
of their
home
town
,
as a result
, they will know the root of some traditions which leads to get more interest in them.
Consequently
, students prefer to attend annual traditions or ceremonies which might result in blending into other groups and preventing from social isolation.
For example
, my niece, has told me that since she read about
root
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the root
of Nowrooz in
history book
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history books
a history book
the history book
, she is more interested in
this
event and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
ceremonial dress.
Thus
, that’s why I think schools should allocate a part of their time to teach students about historical knowledge of their
home
town
.
Secondly
, I think that children by learning about
history
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the history
of their
home
town
can survive it and transit it the
next
generation, which is the most prominent advantage of teaching local
history
to students. Everybody knows that except for books and resources, a number of people are needed to transfer historical information
to
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in
into
the future.
Therefore
, I think
history
subject of
home
town
should be considered in curriculum which helps them to be a good source of historical information. In
this
way, a large proportion of historical knowledge can be saved,
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
and transferred to the
next
generation
by
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of
students who are subject specialists of the future.
Thus
, that’s why I think saving and transition of local
history
is another major advantage of teaching
this
science to the students.
For instance
, one of my friends told me that if she had studied more about Iran’s
history
in school, she would have taught her daughter in
this
field.
In
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To
sum up, I think teaching historical aspect of
home
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the home town
town
to
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of
the students in schools leads to get some information about traditions and saving local
history
to transit to the
next
decades.
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