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Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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We live in the age when technologies are developing extremely rapidly.
nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
 our homes are full of different kinds of devices and equipment and it is usually considered as a positive development. I will support
this
 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, usage of household equipment can help to save significant amount of time. We can see that
such
 devices as modern cookers with timers, washing machines or vacuum cleaners make it possible to complete all work about the house
in
Suggestion
with
 noticeably shorter period of time that it was several decades
aho
in the past
ago
 when
such
 technologies were not common for average families.
This
 time can be used for other activities like education, sport, or hobbies.
For example
, the recent research made by "MK" found that the number of women with higher education in
developed
Suggestion
developing
 countries has increased by 60% since 1950 and the authors claim that the development of
househod
a social unit living together
household
 devices is the key reason behind
this
 situation.
Furthermore
, the appliance of technologies in our common life has made it significantly safer. It can be seen, that smoke detectors, fire alarms or CCTV as well as many other safety systems have become an essential part of any modern house.
For instance
, according the information on the website of Russian Government the number of fires in houses and apartments has noticeably decreased in the 21st century. To
summ
a quantity of money
sum
 up, the usage of up-to-date technologies
have risen
Suggestion
has risen
 the quality of life and made it possible to deal with common household duties more rapidly and safely.
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