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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Tourism has acquired diverse dimensions over the years. It is a play significant role in the economy of the countries. Some people argue that tourism generates conflict between people.
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, I strongly disagree with above notion and in the favour of statement that say it creates understanding between inhabitants from various nations. There are ample reasons which supports the above argument.
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 of all, international tourist visit local places and they can realize local food,
culture
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, traditions, history and so on. Which helps them to understand moral values and rituals of local dwellers.
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, nowadays many countries' economy mainly depends on tourism. Which result into fulfil employment of thousand local people.
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, countries' economies like Thailand and Indonesia, mostly depend on the tourism.
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, it is often observed that many time conflicts happen because tourists are not aware about local
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 and traditions.
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, some people believe that nowadays with the increasing number of tourists, misunderstanding between local in habitats and tourist often took place. They
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 argue that sometimes tourists throw away rubbish like plastic, cans, bottles and so on.
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 local people feel like tourists are disrespectful about their
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. As increasing of visitors, infrastructure and hospitality developments. Which creates fear in local people because expansion of infrastructure they have to move to other places. In conclusion, I do admit that the government can take some serious steps to reduce tension between local people and visitors by providing proper knowledge about
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 and waste management system.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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