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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 to inform you that, I need of some electrical goods for the construction of new buildings. So I would like to purchase the materials that are required from your shop. My name is Eliza. I am working as Civil Engineer and I had got a new contract for constructing an apartment. Almost the work has been completed. The only part left is the electrical work. My friend
Mr.
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 Roy, who is your regular customer suggested your store. He said that the items will be
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 good quality and we can purchase all the materials
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 a reasonable price. So I am approaching your shop for the task to be accomplished. The necessary items required for electrical work are copper wires, pipes, holders, switches, clamps etc. All these materials are needed in various numbers. May I know all these things are available in your store
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 Suppose if any of these are not in stock, can you able to order those items.
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, I would like to know the prices for these goods. If possible, please mail me the price list
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me
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. At present, I am out of
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. I will come back only by
next
 week. After returning back, I have to start the
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 immediately, so is it possible to hold the goods that are required. If you do so I will be very thankful to you. If you are able to do please intimate me through the mail, so that I can make other arrangements. Seeking
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a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, Eliza
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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