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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is believed that the development of
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 will lead to the loss of traditional cultures in some nations, and they definitely cannot coexist. Personally, I partially disagree with
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 idea because except for communication, I believe that technological advancement plays a constructive role in fostering these cultures in other aspects. On the one hand, it is breakthroughs in
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 that make a contribution to the disappearance of traditional methods in communication. To be specific, in the past, people mainly held face-to-face conversations with those in their communities or wrote letters to long-distance relatives.
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, phones and computers have gradually overtaken those communicative approaches. These days, they tend to make phone calls and send emails rather than talking man-to-man and using handwritten letters as these modern methods are more convenient and time saving.
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, technological advances undeniably help to preserve traditional cultures. Thanks to the mass media, people can effortlessly obtain a copious amount of knowledge about different cultures in the world.
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, should a culture be well-known, it will be conserved and developed by not only its communities but the government as well. Buddhism in Thailand is a vivid example. With the help of social media, residents in other continents,
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 as Europe and America, know and are attracted by
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 special tradition, thereby visiting
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 country. To promote tourism, authorities have invested in the preservation and development of
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 culture. In conclusion, despite resulting in changes in communication,
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 has obviously encouraged traditional cultures to thrive. My view is that
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 and cultures are compatible, and humans should utilize the latest technologies to preserve traditional values.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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