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It is better for young to get an advice from old people than young people. Do you agree or disagree

#advice #people
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Young people should get
advice
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 from older people better than people that are at the same
age
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. I complexly disagree with
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 statement.
This
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 essay will discuss thought out my personal perspective. There are several reasons that teenagers can
advice
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 to people that are in the same
age
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Although
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, many people believe that it is better for younger to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
 people who are older. According to my opinion, some topic we cannot get the
advice
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 from older.
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, when teenager want suggestion about their study,
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however there
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however, there
 are gap
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age so
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age, so
 many things are changed, whether it be the curriculum
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 there are many new majors have been create in a recent year so, it is much better for young people
to
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advise
to advise
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other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 that are in the similar
age
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.
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, every coin has two side older people have more life experience than younger. They can give suggestions based on their past experiences.
The clear
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The clearest
 example of
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 is in some situation seniors have can make more unbiased judgments. So there can
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advice
give advice to
advise
 you in many ways In conclusion, Older people can give
advice
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 about
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a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 skills except in study part or technology.
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, it is much better to listen to both sides, so you can be more confident.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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