One Government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in arts events in the sama years

In
this
chart show proportional government spending on the arts between in 1995 and 2005. The chart consisting of four
category
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categories
spesifically
in distinction from others
specifically
is visual arts, theatre, music and literature.
In
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During
the years have same
the number
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number
of people who
partisipating
taking part in an activity
participating
participation
in arts events in four
category
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categories
too. Proportional government in
category
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the category
of literature
have
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has
the highest spending than other in 1995, but in 2005 in
category
of theatre and music who have the highest spending in the same piece.
That is
years have
same the number
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the same number
same number
of people who have
participating
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participated
in arts event. In visual
category
1995 have
lil bit
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a Lil bit
Lil bit
highest
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higher
than 2005 but still in 50.000
partisipating
taking part in an activity
participating
participation
.
Meanwhile in
Accept comma addition
Meanwhile, in
category
of theatre and literature have
lil bit
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a Lil bit
Lil bit
highest
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higher
in 2005. In
category
of music have different highest between 1995 and 2005. In 2005 have 150.000
partisipant but
Accept comma addition
participants, but
participants but
in 1995 have
participant
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participated
under range 150.000.
This
is
different situation
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a different situation
between proportional government spending and the number people who participating.
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