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Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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#Bismillah The relationship between mankind and animals has been taking shape for a several centuries.
Thus
 nowadays
also
 has some kind of people who treat birds, cats, dogs or other animals as members of their family and they have a close
realationship
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationship
relationships
 with them. But there are some people opposed that act. According to my opinion that
act
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an act
the act
 is not good and below I explain my opinion. In my point of view, there are several
reasons according
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reasons, according
 to my opinion.
First
 of all animals can not be as human and they can not feel like
human
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a human
humans
.
Additionally they
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Additionally, they
 may be a good friend to
human but
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humans, but
humans but
 not always. And too much attachment is
also
 worst habit. Because they would not live longer like
human
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humans
a human
. Sometimes pets are express loving affection and from that some kind of people encourages, even they can get out stress. But sometimes they disrespect their
baboos
a very young child (birth to 1 year) who has not yet begun to walk or talk
babies
boo-boos
bamboos
. The following step is that some people spend a lot of money to care their pets.
Instead
 of
this
 they can make charity for poor people who needy
to
Suggestion
with
 food, cloth and
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 and they
can not
can not
cannot
 study at schools, lyceums, universities as
us
plural of "I"
we
. It will be
verh
used as an intensifier
very
 helpful for them and they will be more
grattitude
a feeling of thankfulness and appreciation
gratitude
 than pets. Eke there another kind of people that spend a lot of time to care their pets.
Thay
Suggestion
They
also
 can attend to their work, family, study and
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
its
 and it
is more useful for them
Suggestion
instead more useful for them treat
is more useful for them instead treat
instead
 treat of pets. On the whole the treating pets is not the good and useful act
to
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of
 people.
Instead treat
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Instead, treat
 of pets they
also
 can do
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 activities.
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