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Social networking websites
such
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 as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram have become an important part of our everyday life.
However
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, it is argued that these sites have a devastating effect on the community and the individuals. I strongly agree with the thought that social websites have a profound negative effect.
To begin
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 with, social networking sites have started hurting relationships. In the present world, people tend to be addicted to various social media
platform
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platforms
 and spend too much time on their social image.
Hence
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/The consequence is that they do not have time/have less time to have a deep conversation with people around them face to face.
Consequently
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/In
this
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 way, people living in modern society are more easily
to feel
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feeling
 physically attached and mentally detached.
Furthermore
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, citizens who are bombed with massive information
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on
 various social media
platform
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platforms
 are facing the problem of losing their
independent
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independence
 thinking mode.
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, during the Covid-19 pandemic, many people believed the misinformation and fake news spreading on the social websites, which causes unnecessary anxiety and panic of the whole society.
As a result
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, the opinions and ideas on social media platforms would affect people’s judgment and decisions in daily life. In conclusion,
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 Facebook and
such
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 sites are beneficial to some extent, I strongly agree with the argument that they have
more detrimental effect
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a more detrimental effect
more detrimental effects
 on both the local community and the people. It is hoped that users will realize
this
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 and learn to use
such
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 platforms more judiciously.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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