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Crime is a big problem in the world. Many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree of disagree? Give your own opinion.

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Committing offensive activities is pervasive nowadays.
Thus
, it is being considered as world's greatest issue. It is asserted by a group of individuals that to deter crime, no measures can be considered as persuasive. In my opinion, I disagree with the given notion as
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
 of steps can be brought
in
Suggestion
into
 action to combat
this
 worsening matter which will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. To initiate with the most effective step, that comes to my mind, should be
in
Suggestion
on
 account of
law
 authorities.
This
 is to say that
law
 should be introduced and applied in
such
 a strict manner that each and everyone ought to obey it.
Otherwise
, hard punishment should be given to those who
float
treat with contemptuous disregard
flout
 the
law
. To exemplify, in India, the drivers who do not follow the traffic rules have to pay a hefty amount of money as fine, and sometimes they have to serve a sentence as well.
Thus
, in order to prevent crime,
law
 should be implemented with introduction of tough punishment. Moving ahead, discouraging offenders requires awareness.
This
 is due to the reason that lack of masses towards unlawful activities.
Thus
, to combat the rising perpetrators, awareness sessions should be arranged. Apart from
this
,
law
Suggestion
the law
 should be a compulsory subject in the school curriculum so that youngsters could be educated about the same during their early ages.
Therefore
,
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 should be heightened to control crime. To conclude,
although
 offensive activities have become one of the serious matters, numerous solutions are there to tackle it. Treading the path of
law
 strictly and to be aware about wrong activities would lead the society towards a crime-free world.

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