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some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. to what extent do you agree?

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I think it is incredibly unfair to say that, nowadays a large number of teenagers tend to tellies their parents by far more than ever.
This
 essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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for
 telling lies and
then
 describe their solutions. From my everyday experience and observation, I can claim that the nowadays majority of young people have to lie to their parents, if they are afraid of some kind of punishments as well as penalties that are given from their father or mother and sometimes it appears evil issues. Teenagers often lie when they are talking about their education, romantic relationship as well as something which happening in their
life
. Sometimes their friends cause to appear in
this
 issue
,
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,
this
 issue, because when one
teenager see
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teenager to see
 that his friend are
laying
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lay
 people, he desires to do it by himself. On these occasions, young people think that their parents have no right to know about their problems or their parents are caring about their child’s
life
. To solve
this
 issue,
teenagers parents
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teenagers, parents
 chose friendly way when they are considering things about
child's
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a child's life
life
. That’s why young people can talk about their secret and problem with people who are warm.
Moreover
, adolescents who believe that their parents have a right to set rules, and who are obligated to obey them, share more information about things which are making their
life
 difficult. I would like to conclude by saying that, a majority of young people can say everything their father and mother, if their parents are gently as well as warm.
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