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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood this should be resident's responsibility's while others think it should be governments's duty. What is your opinion?

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There are many arguments about if we want to have a clean residential area we have to clean it by ourselves or it is the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 job to clean it for us. From my point of view, I strongly believe that it's not a job only for the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 or a residence to discriminate all the dirt.
Although
this
 issue need both to make it happen and sustainable, described in the following paragraph. Every people want to live in nice and clean place.
However
, many people do the contrary thing with their home town.
This
 is a gigantic problem. We should not let our place dirty by our thoughtless behaviour
such
 as throwing the trash on the street. We should remind in our brain that if we want our neighbourhood to be cleaned, we should not do that kind of selfish thing. We should clean up all the dirt in our home town that might be the significant cause of the disease.
Lastly
, we will get our clean home town back.
In addition
, there are many kinds of people in the society,
for example
, good
person
 and a bad
person
 if someone with the unwanted behaviour always makes our residential area dirty as a big trash can and the good
person
 who always get rid of the waste. The good
person
 will be very tired and sad that while he is cleaning, someone threw the trash again.
Therefore we
Accept comma addition
Therefore, we
 need a law for the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to control some people with unwanted behaviour and make them have the responsibility for the society. To conclude, we need both participate from the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 and the resident to help each other with many ways to remove all unwanted things out of their residential area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accountable
  • benefit
  • community pride
  • consistent
  • effective
  • engage
  • enforcement
  • foster
  • hybrid approach
  • infrastructure
  • local pride
  • maintenance
  • resident's responsibility
  • resources
  • systematically
  • waste collection
  • waste disposal
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