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Government should fund scientific research rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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I agree, scientific exploration is vital for the advancement of a country and the
government
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 is in a better position to conduct scientific studies compared to the private industries. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons why the State has an upper hand in
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 regard.
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 and foremost, the public tends to believe the credibility of the findings by the public institutions. The
government
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 being elected by the people, it is evident that their work will be unbiased and provide favourable outcome towards developing the nation.
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, the corporate organizations most likely conduct investigations for monetary benefits.
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, the Gujrat
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 on successfully completing generic medicine research, made available to its residents, economical drugs, whereas the Pharmaceutical
companies despite
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companies, despite
 holding the know-how, used it only for its own benefit.
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, the
government
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 is in a better position to finance research projects while creating in-house employment for the professionals. With the backing of the public administration, the universities and academics would be able to experiment and launch any researches that would aid the nation in its development, which
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 motivates the intellects and skilled professionals to work for the country.
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, the US
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’s support
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of
 the nanotechnology projects, has benefited the nation in
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the production
 of clean and green energy and accounts for
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the number
 of scientists in the world. In conclusion, I believe the local authorities are in a better position for instigating scientific researches.
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, they should ensure that the children are encouraged to participate in experiments
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in
 science in the schools, so that, they aspire to advance in the field of science contributing to the nation’s growth.

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