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Psychological illness may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illness, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society , however , is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illness or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#illness #disabilities #society
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In today's world
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 mental sickness cases are increasing
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however
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 some people are more compassionate towards people
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those, who
are facing
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is facing
 bodily diseases. I completely agree with the notion that psychic illness, is less acceptable in
cotemporary
characteristic of the present
contemporary
society
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 with, people always feel pity for the person
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 who is
handicaped
incapable of functioning as a consequence of injury or illness
handicapped
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 because people can vividly see his or her disability.
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 creates a sense of sympathy for physically sick and resultantly
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become
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becomes
 more admissible in
society
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thus
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 generally
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 the mental diseases are not easy to understand by a layman. One can not guess about a
nuerological
of or relating to or used in or practicing neurology
neurological
 disorder or illness of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
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 without having expertise, which leads to
neglection
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 of
pain
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the pain
 and suffering of a mentally sick person.
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 a survey has been conducted on city dwellers of America
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 and it depicts that 7 out of 10 people do not know anything about mental disorders.
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, there are no special care departments for mentally challenged persons in public hospitals and victims are always sent to mental asylum or
rehabitational
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
, without understanding the cause of
thier
of them or themselves
their
 sickness.
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, governments have started various campaigns to help and diagnose
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 yet
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society
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ignore
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ignores
 these facilities due to lack of awareness.
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lack
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a lack
 of empathy and compassion for psychopaths. In conclusion, physically ill people always getting the
suppport
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
 from
society
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 in the mode of
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 while
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neglection
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 and ignorance
is faced
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are faced
 by the mentally
retarted
relatively slow in mental or emotional or physical development
retarded
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