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Universities should accept equal numbers of female and male students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It is argued that similar chances should be given to both genders to study in their favourable subjects at universities. I contend that
this
 allegation is true because imposing restrictions will hamper individual’s development.
However
, I believe that it is premature to judge that the dissimilarity between genders in
this
 specific case has no redeeming features. On the one hand, it is true that enough freedom should be given to each person to pursue their ambitions.
That is
 why when the acceptance of students at college for each subject is based on their aptitude and knowledge, seeds of hope are planted in their heart and
therefore
 they have more inclination to flourish their unveiled skills. Under
this
 circumstance, they make tremendous efforts to become a useful member of their societies.
However
, if the situation is against their expectation, these students will feel frustrated as realizing that they become a victim of gender discrimination and there is no way to fulfil their dreams.
On the other hand
, it is fair to say that there is a myriad of contrasts between males and females by their nature,
such
 as their abilities, characteristics, and so forth. For
this
 reason, it is suggested that when it comes to accepting them for subjects at college some criteria should be set to make sure whether majors are suitable for them or not. Taking my home country as an example, decision makers have imposed quotas on subject called mechanical engineering for males, and nursing for females because their personalities are more adjustable with these subjects. In conclusion, while it is valuable that educational institutes attempt to make a balance between the acceptance of men and women for subjects at universities, I tend dissimilarities between two genders should be taken into account simultaneously.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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