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The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The bar chart and pie charts illustrate the percentages of
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a layman
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layman
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laymen
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 in Glasgow having different levels of
education
 in the year 2010. Information is divided into five different
age
groups
 in
bar
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a bar
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 chart and by gender in the pie charts.
Overall
, the maximum number of
people
 with
university
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a university
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education
 were in younger
age
groups
,
while
 in the retiree
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,people
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 most of them did not have qualifications. The proportions of men and women were
simmilar
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similar
 and it's showed minor
different
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 between the level of
education
. The percentage of mankind with
university
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education
 is approximately three
quartes
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quarters
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 in the
young-
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young age
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age
;
people
 and it's reduced in the later
age
 group and
steay
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stay
steady
 at 50% in the 50-75
age
groupsand
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groups and
 just 25% in the
last
age
groups
. In the
contrast
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 no qualification is just 9% in
first
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the first
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 3
age
groups
 and that value increased to 30% in the 50-75
age
also
,
escalation
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 to 72% for
over
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those over
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 75 ages. The proportion of men and women in each section of
education
 was nearly a
third
 portion and only slightly
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about
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 3% in university graduates and
people
 who do not have any degrees.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, age, groups, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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