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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
#percentage #people #five #portions #fruit #vegetables #uk
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give
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 bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion of men, women and children who consume five
portionof
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portions of
portion of
fruits
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of fruits
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 and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom from 2001 to 2008.
As
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From
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 an
overall
 perspective , the highest
percentage
 of consumption is marked in 2006 by each category and
then
 shows a slight decline
on
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in
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remaining
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the remaining
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 two years.
In
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From
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 2001 to 2003 the proportion of five
portion
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portions
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 of fruits and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 consumed by men and children remains
table
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stable
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 at around 13% and 70%. But in the case of
women
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 the construction rate starts from around 22% and inclined to about 26
percentage
 in the year 2003. From 2004 to 2006,
to
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three categories has a moderate increase to stop the
percentage
 of women who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables
reaches
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 its
peaks
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 in 2006, which is about 30%. In terms of men, the highest consumption
percentage
 is
also
 in 2006 and remains
same
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at
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in
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 2007 which is about 28%. In the year 2007, the children's proportion rate shows a remarkable increase to about 25%.
However
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 in
2008
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,2008
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 the three categories show a slight decline in consumption.
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