Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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That Is

noticeable watching television affect children's

behavior whether

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behaviour, whether

behaviour whether

related to the program and length of

time

or not, some people argue that only watching

can change children’s

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

that is

not related to

program and the amount of

time

children spend on watching

However

, I believe that length of

time

has a more significant influence on

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

of children. On the one hand, watching

for a long

time

and when children become over-reliant on television for entertainment have a negative impact on children’

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

lies in a fact that brings

addiction for children

that is

resulting in the physical problem for youngsters.

For example

, children fall into the habit sedentary lifestyle

that is

a highly detrimental effect on physical health.

In addition

, decrease outdoors and physical activities for youngsters, the more significant issue of excessive watching

impairs social communication abilities of children;

besides

, they reluctant to be in relation with others in their real life, so children find it hard to play and live with others.

Consequently

, watching

in a long

time

can change the normal behaviour of children and that a have a destructive influence on them.

On the other hand

, without regard to the length of

time

that youngster consume to watching

that have evil impact on them, watching movies and images on television can have a bad effect of children’s

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

. Some countries

shows glamourized depictions of inappropriate products and

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

behaviours

such

as drug addict and violence;

thus

, it may adopt unhealthy habits.

For instance

, youngster by watching violence movies encourage them to have a harsh

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and children persuade to drink alcohol and use drug is fashionable, without being aware to health risk. In conclusion,

although

both factors play a vital role to have an effect on children's

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

, but I personally believe watching

particularly in a long

time

have a most considerable impact on them.

Hence

, supervision of parents can avoid youngsters from damage of watching

in their individual and social life

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Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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